Is the meaning of value an expensive object that you own and cherish? Could it be a special moment that you experience every so often? In today's society, most people value something that they posses. It can be as simple as a piece of clothing or as complex as a car. However, would you know the difference between something that has value and something that doesn't?
On a Friday afternoon, the students are counting down the minutes until they are free. I sit in graphics class, as the clock races to two o' clock. We rush to write down our homework and gather up our backpacks, finishing up our projects on the computers.
The last bell of the day finally rings and the class is dismissed. We rush out of the school and in a good mood and I wait patiently for my brother to get outside and unlock his jeep, which towers over me. As we storm out of the parking lot, we try our best to avoid traffic and the music from his I-pod blares over the car stereo. I ride home with the whole weekend in front of me and I can finally relax.
I grab my scratched up board and I begin to roll down the street. Popping and flipping the board under my feet, I land trick after trick just as a warm up. If we are lucky enough to be granted a ride from one of our parents to the local skate park where we met up with other friends.
We host a miniature contest for fun to see who can perform the best maneuvers. I go for my insane trick in front of all my friends. I surprisingly come very close to pulling it off. My friend has his camera nearby and it influences me to try it again. I drop in on the ramp and set up my feet. I pop the board and it flips between my legs, coming back around to the grip tape. My feet reunite with the board as I stomp on it, riding away and landing the trick perfectly. My friends cheer and I review my trick filmed on the camera.
I value my Friday afternoons and my skateboard very much. These values both make me happy and they are ones I wouldn’t trade for anything. While I am on my way out the door after school on Friday, I feel a sense of freedom that is similar to when I am riding on my board. These values also let me relax. Even though skateboarding doesn’t sound relaxing, I feel that it is because I am not only riding and having fun, but I am spending time with my friends too.
However, I do see my two values differently too. For example, my skateboard lets me express my creativity. Friday afternoons are different because they just make me happy when I am out of school and I have the whole weekend to do what I please.
In my opinion, value is what makes me happy and what matters to me the most regardless of the price because anyone can buy an object if they have enough money. You cannot put a price tag on a memory. But if one is special enough, a memory it will stay with you forever.
4 comments:
Connors essay says that anyone can buy an object if they have enough money so sometimes objects arent valuless, and I agree. I think that Connor likes skateboarding more than last minuted in school on friday because from what he says in his essay it seems like he practises a lot.
A vivid quote was "I go for my insane trick in front of all my friends." Insane was a good adjective to use in this sentence.
One of the essays strengths was its introduction and concluson. his introduction had good questions such as "However, would you know the difference between something that has value and something that doesn't?" This made me want to keep reading the essay. The conclusion rapped up everything that he had in the body of his essay when he said "You cannot put a price tag on a memory. But if one is special enough, a memory it will stay with you forever." This wasa a very good sentence to rap up his essay.
Lastly what could be improved was his description. He could have told more about what his skateboard looked like or what the board did while it was in the air.Overall Connor did a very nice job.
In Connor's essay he says that things can be valueable even if they do not cost a lot of money. I do agree with what Connor said because I think some of the most valuable things in life are memories or great feelings. In his story he values his friday afternoons and skateboarding.\
The most vivd part of the story to me was his discription of him skateboarding. I like the part of the story when he said that he does a hard trick and his friends video tape it. I thought that he used great adjectives in this paragraph and put a lot of effort into it.
I think that one of the strengths that was shown in Connor's story was his conclusion. I liked how he talked about how skateboarding and his Friday afternoons are similar and different. It was developed and had a lot of detail in it.
I think that maybe you could try to discribe your Friday afternoons a little more though. I liked what said for it but I think you could make it better by adding what you might do on Friday afternoons other than skateboarding.
Connor shows in his first paragraph that things that you buy obviosly have value, but things that you cant buy also have value that can be as great as things that you can buy. He really shows that his skateboarding is valued to him in a great sense.
Connor has a great way of puttiong ideas into word format like this, "I grab my scratched up board and I begin to roll down the street. Popping and flipping the board under my feet, I land trick after trick just as a warm up." Connor caught and held my attention with that sentence.
Connor did a good job with organization. His order from when the events happen really gives a good touch to the writing piece. This helps readers understand exactly what is happening and why.
Finally, the only thing that i would change abouth the essay would be a little bit more adjectives. The existing adjectives were great, but there could of been a few more.
The author seems to be saying that today, people usually have an item that is most valuable to them. In his essay he says that he values his skateboard and Friday afternoons. He believes that there are many things that in today’s society, most people value an item or something they can possess, not a moment or something they can’t possess.
The object that I found most vividly described was how he likes Friday afternoons. He wrote it in a way that I can really picture everyone in his class waiting for the bell to ring for them to be “free”. He used words that made it easy to picture his description.
One overall strength of the essay was the author’s word choice. He used very descriptive words that helped make everything he described easy to picture. For example “ On a Friday afternoon, the students are counting down the minutes until they are free. I sit in graphics class, as the clock races to two o' clock. We rush to write down our homework and gather up our backpacks, finishing up our projects on the computers.
The last bell of the day finally rings and the class is dismissed.”
One suggestion I have is to go into detail a little more about his skateboard. He did a really good job describing what happens in his last class of the day, but he needs to be a little more descriptive about what his skateboard looks like and what he feels like when he’s riding it. Other than that it was a very well written essay.
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